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Friday 24 July 2020

Language Feature

Hallo readers

Today I had to write about this 7 year old boy running 800M long. I have wrote a story about me being the 7 year old boy running 800M long. We had to write what we feel or hear in the video. if you want the video click on the text that says "click here"


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Here is my awesome work




thanks for looking at my work please comment and have a great day
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3 comments:

  1. Anonymous24 July 2020 at 11:18

    Hey Rinaz
    I love the story I think it is nice I love how much sounds you have used i think you just need to make the ending a little more interesting but it was a great story bye Ellenessa

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  2. Anonymous24 July 2020 at 11:19

    Hi Rinaz,
    I really like how you kept your story short but still discriptive and cool. I also think it's cool how you said that was you when you were 7

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  3. Mrs Cassidy28 July 2020 at 19:30

    Thank you Rinaz for giving me a picture in my head with the words you have used.I don't know if you won or not.Where did you place?.
    I like the use of some juicy words-yelling,puffing,gunshot.

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